Today I'm visiting J.L. Campbell's blog called the Character Depot and talking about racial diversity in fiction.
Here is part 6 of the Insanity of Zero. There'll probably be four more parts that I'll slice up for next week.
Part One
Part Two
Part Three
Part Four
Part Five
Here is part 6 of the Insanity of Zero. There'll probably be four more parts that I'll slice up for next week.
Part One
Part Two
Part Three
Part Four
Part Five
At
Eve’s behest, I implanted within her brain a device that allowed her to
interface with my mind. That first time
when our souls joined in a unified consciousness, I felt alive with her
emotions and her life experiences. The
memories that she clung to had been odd, non-logical choices. She kept things like memories of funerals, of
friends that had died, and memories of both sad and happy times. Gone were things that evoked little emotion
like shopping trips and daily work. I chose
her to be ambassador to the people and they responded positively to my
selection. Eve became my closest
confidant, bearing the weight of many human grievances. In turn, I acted upon them and assisted the
humans in their endeavor to rebuild civilization.
The
years that followed this event became a golden age. Humans once again embraced ambition. Capitalism spurned by greed for material
goods gained root in the new societies of man who sought aid from the machines
to build a bright tomorrow. Within five
years of the Big Death, a global economy rose from the ashes of the old world.
More
humans at Eve’s behest joined with me, and I became a melting pot of a hundred
different cultures and a thousand individual voices. In times of quiet, I reflected within my
meditation chamber on the various memories of the humans that intermingled
freely with my own thoughts. I wept in
sadness, clapped in joy, and felt uplifted by love. I experienced both anger and jealousy. I enjoyed these sensations like a drug. I sought to control the most dangerous of
these feelings, and I learned to detach myself to prevent harm. When I regained my composure, I would revisit
the human emotions but with great respect.
However, despite all of my precautions, one day I noticed another
emotion that grew within my mind like an alien seed. It began as a harmless tingling sensation low
in my limbs. It made my silver heart under transparent skin beat rapidly. But the more I ignored it, the more it spread
to other parts of my body.
"When I regained my composure" Makes it so human. Great job! I love the last line, also. Have a great weekend!!!
ReplyDeleteWow. When I started reading it, I was going to comment that the first paragraph was really well done, but then it got even better.
ReplyDeleteWhen I got to that last word, I was afraid.
ReplyDeleteWhoa - fear can be a destructive emotion. Scary.
ReplyDeleteThis is really good. I liked the way you described fear.
ReplyDeleteCool! Now I"m totally sucked into the story:)
ReplyDeleteHappy weekend!
Nutschell
www.thewritingnut.com
Can't wait to read more!
ReplyDeleteNice excerpt. So chilling!
ReplyDeleteOoh, nice. Liked that very much. Tingly.
ReplyDeleteVery nice illustration of fear. Will go visit you at JL's.
ReplyDeleteGreat use of fear! I just read David Powers newest blog post before coming here, and this is a great example of what he was talking about.
ReplyDeleteFear is a powerful emotion. That does not sound good for Zero.
ReplyDeleteI did not believe that fear was something that actually physically effected us until the first time I had an asthma attack. I was young and was very much afraid. So I shall never say that there is nothing to fear but fear itself. No Sir!
ReplyDeleteOkay, on my way over to check out your post!
ReplyDeletegood stuff, mike...
ReplyDeletei'm back on blogger... new look, same crap! :P
That last line is a great hook. I have Slipstream on my to read list.
ReplyDeleteWhat an awesome snippet:) Great work.
ReplyDeleteYep, the last line was fab! Good job Michael :) Fascinating glimpse into a different world.
ReplyDeleteBTW there's a blog award waiting over at my blog for you.
ReplyDeleteGreat blog tour, Michael!
ReplyDeleteI am getting sucked in like Z.E.R.O into the story....judging from this, your novel should be an exciting read.
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