tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post4070772673922456124..comments2024-03-22T12:11:58.453-06:00Comments on Michael Offutt: Lightning FlashedMichael Offutt, Phantom Readerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10557969104886174930noreply@blogger.comBlogger39125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-83363065203544064682012-07-04T10:01:01.389-06:002012-07-04T10:01:01.389-06:00Great story! Mine got a little out of control and ...Great story! Mine got a little out of control and ended up a bit longer than 300 words. Check it out:<br /><br />http://onfictionwriting.com/lastmonthwinner/Lightning-Flashed/99/Adam Gaylordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10776176053095754224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-19624717915541215452012-05-24T21:29:07.498-06:002012-05-24T21:29:07.498-06:00You set the scene masterfully! But what happens to...You set the scene masterfully! But what happens to/with the thieves??? :-)<br /><a href="http://minalobo.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Some Dark Romantic</a>Mina Lobohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10173895884776280826noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-63361987551977499662012-05-24T10:59:08.060-06:002012-05-24T10:59:08.060-06:00Great painting of this scene with your description...Great painting of this scene with your descriptions. I loved the names you created too.<br /><br />I'll announce the finalists tomorrow.Cherie Reichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16663147386014122939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-9004510576527857192012-05-24T09:31:36.504-06:002012-05-24T09:31:36.504-06:00Very descriptive writing . . .I want to hear more ...Very descriptive writing . . .I want to hear more of this story!Tyrean Martinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15356604721537744361noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-79420575061923332402012-05-24T08:42:12.878-06:002012-05-24T08:42:12.878-06:00Really fine description. It creates a solid sense ...Really fine description. It creates a solid sense of place and conveys the strangeness of that world.Mary Maddoxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11804303876835029488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-82924830260768292432012-05-23T23:43:41.453-06:002012-05-23T23:43:41.453-06:00Awesome world building in such a small word count....Awesome world building in such a small word count. Wow!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04419944234795666194noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-42331079765689726322012-05-23T22:23:27.608-06:002012-05-23T22:23:27.608-06:00It doesn't sound like a world I'd like to ...It doesn't sound like a world I'd like to live, but one I'd love to read more about. There was so much there in such few words. Great entry!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03060064276650474244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-81808955938505941352012-05-23T18:07:58.900-06:002012-05-23T18:07:58.900-06:00very nice piece; it felt dark and cold, very winte...very nice piece; it felt dark and cold, very wintery.mshatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-87935992463815120342012-05-23T13:57:37.428-06:002012-05-23T13:57:37.428-06:00And? And? What is with the thieves? What are they ...And? And? What is with the thieves? What are they there to steal?Brooke R. Bussehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17147444223968856153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-5932383711832575532012-05-23T08:34:51.921-06:002012-05-23T08:34:51.921-06:00The descriptions in this are beautiful!The descriptions in this are beautiful!Summer Rosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08122694893668693244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-35990759718977013962012-05-23T07:40:13.004-06:002012-05-23T07:40:13.004-06:00Excellent description and imagery as usual. I coul...Excellent description and imagery as usual. I could picture myself standing on the bridge facing the castle.Elise Fallsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14734537117333738468noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-17160754117446173992012-05-22T23:32:21.149-06:002012-05-22T23:32:21.149-06:00I loved your piece. I felt all scared and creepy a...I loved your piece. I felt all scared and creepy as I read it. Great job.Bellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14175778756449339363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-75968976991177123982012-05-22T22:41:12.038-06:002012-05-22T22:41:12.038-06:00Michael, I applaud you. You're everywhere, co...Michael, I applaud you. You're everywhere, constantly joining contests and the like. I envy your time! Good luck.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-13870512070206818282012-05-22T20:34:44.326-06:002012-05-22T20:34:44.326-06:00"The Hall of the Blades Acuuarum had been ere..."The Hall of the Blades Acuuarum had been erected by Blackstone Giants, quarried from the pits by slaves who toiled with pickaxe and shovel at the base of the Mountains of Illusion that rose like the sharp finger bones of massive skeletal warriors in the East."<br /><br />Favorite line. Rare that I like such a mouthful, but I loved it. :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00273059558675234923noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-33244866594241545452012-05-22T17:32:58.367-06:002012-05-22T17:32:58.367-06:00Great description. I love that the small bridge is...Great description. I love that the small bridge is in the shape of a serpents tongue.Ciarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15628488753277495111noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-86919069373492675322012-05-22T17:03:23.682-06:002012-05-22T17:03:23.682-06:00I wanna see what happens next !!!!!I wanna see what happens next !!!!!Nephy's Worldhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12677130973931453911noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-51155938656497361552012-05-22T15:41:02.973-06:002012-05-22T15:41:02.973-06:00I love the description of the scene and they way y...I love the description of the scene and they way you conveyed the oppressive mood of the place. Great writing!Golden Eaglehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08721520451194318436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-14111953148685753592012-05-22T15:32:41.447-06:002012-05-22T15:32:41.447-06:00I love 'gossamer shroud of winter'. You...I love 'gossamer shroud of winter'. You're a very talented writer, Michael.M Paxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14096697282530998519noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-20487816305198113992012-05-22T15:05:50.666-06:002012-05-22T15:05:50.666-06:00Wow, you've got your world set up well. Nice i...Wow, you've got your world set up well. Nice imagery. <br /><br />Thank you for your comment on my blog. If you want to interview me, I would love that.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12160669603997465454noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-35575702367696473222012-05-22T15:00:02.032-06:002012-05-22T15:00:02.032-06:00So much scene setting and atmosphere in a small pi...So much scene setting and atmosphere in a small piece. Sounds like a solid beginning for a new novel. And I like the hint of danger.Helenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14967821142796562697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-12653169238778878992012-05-22T14:05:45.794-06:002012-05-22T14:05:45.794-06:00Lots of dark imagery here, Mike. Dangerous water. ...Lots of dark imagery here, Mike. Dangerous water. Impressive structure.J.L. Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05666634455836834179noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-27960305136062714752012-05-22T13:29:42.804-06:002012-05-22T13:29:42.804-06:00So much world that I want to see more story. More ...So much world that I want to see more story. More to come?Crystal Collierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03912469552483168148noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-61208357518726719402012-05-22T12:36:46.515-06:002012-05-22T12:36:46.515-06:00Very atmospheric.Very atmospheric.Liz A.https://www.blogger.com/profile/16531953467834426316noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-83155996174406891792012-05-22T12:02:50.480-06:002012-05-22T12:02:50.480-06:00You've managed to put a lot of atmosphere into...You've managed to put a lot of atmosphere into such a short space, I love it. It sounds so foreboding.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02548680159204361401noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2495499100279472520.post-80026849217232632642012-05-22T11:05:16.314-06:002012-05-22T11:05:16.314-06:00Interesting... is there more?Interesting... is there more?Andrew Leonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13964775673414653644noreply@blogger.com